Hi Benjamin,

Thanks for submitting to Pindeldyboz, but I'm going to pass on this
story.  It's an intriguing scene, but it feels a little rushed,
particularly once the narrator starts trying to help the baby.  For
example, I'm not clear why the baby is a "half-formed lopsided thing"
-- is this just from its injuries or is there something else wrong
with it?  I'd also like a bit more clarification about the experience
the narrator and Jamie have -- are they just in training as
paramedics, or have they been in the field before?  I think the scene
reads a bit differently if it's their first field experience than if
they are vacationing EMTs.

Thanks,
Whitney Steen
Web Editor, Pindeldyboz

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Not as enthusiastic as the last two.  This is the story I submitted.

First rejection letter.
Second rejection letter.

Welp - I got some reading to do.  Another hundred pages, and then I still haven't done research for either the Joyce or the James papers.